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Wednesday, 27 May 2015

My DLO for the story why is the moon upside down

Hello this is my DLO and my friends help me with this DLO. We readied the book for two weeks and now I'm posting my DLO to you to give me feed back on. I hope you enjoy this not finished DLO but its almost done.

Thursday, 21 May 2015

My information report about the red sand stormy planet Mars


In Week 5 of Term 2 our class focussed on how to write great information reports.
We wrote about the planet Mars as we are in the middle of learning about Planet Earth and Beyond. Learning how to write a great information report will help us with our self-guided topics in a few weeks time.
Here is my writing, after I have self-assessed and peer-assessed my work.

My Information Report Success Criteria:
Self
Peer
My heading:


  • is an interesting title (I might have phrased the title as a question.)


My opening paragraph:


  • says what my report is about in a clear way


  • gives a general “classification” – and maybe a technical classification


  • outlines the main features of the subject


My main paragraphs:


  • have sub-headings where helpful


  • have clear topic sentences  (topic and main point)


  • are organised so that each paragraph is about a different aspect of the subject


  • give detailed information (factual descriptions)


  • include specific, technical vocabulary


  • are generally balanced (have a similar amount of detail about the different aspects I write about)


  • may have helpful: tables, pictures and/or diagrams to add information


My end paragraph:


  • draws the report together/sums up my main points


  • may give a personal opinion; ask the reader a question and/or tell the reader where further information may be found



An information report about the red dust storm planet Mars.
Opening Paragraph
Have ever wonder what it’s like on mars? Well heres 2 little fun facts about the red planet Mars. Mars is the 4th planet in our solar system.Also the planet Mars is named after the Roman greek god of war Mars.
Body Paragraphs
SURFACE FEATURES FOR MARS:
Mars is a lifeless planet because no living being hasn’t been there or anything (only dirt, mountain and the biggest volcano lives there too.) Mars doesn’t have any water only ice and desires because it’s a dry planet and also its like venus how its got lots of volcanoes that sprays but instead it’s caused by asteroids and meteorites. But also it has lot of sandstorms that happen and can actually blind you. But not living being like us humans can go as far to mars so people made drones to go to mars.

Why Humans can’t live on mars?:

Well one reason is that there’s only little oxygen on Mars and the air on Mars is carbon dioxide. That the first reason but there’s still more to go. Another reason is that you can get skin cancer from Mars because it’s not like earth how its got the invisible force field from getting the UV rays away from us so we don’t get skin cancer. Also at night time at mars it’s so cold it's like a ice cube just bigger so you’ll freeze to death. Even though at night time it’s freezing cold at day time it kind of warm because Mars is like antarctica how cold its is and how hot mars can get is 20 degrees and how how cold is -150 degrees. So thats just my reason why humans can’t live on Mars. Also it only takes 6 months to get to mars so thats the bad thing but the good thing is thats you can eat lots of space food in the ship.

Mars’ moons?:

Mars’ is the only planet that has two moons (Named Phobos and Deimos.) Mars’ moons are not the same, One is bigger than the other one ( Phobos is bigger than Deimos.) Now that we know that mars has two moons maybe our moon is bigger than Mars’ moons?
ending Paragraph:
Now that I’ve told you some facts about Mars I hope these body paragraphs and introduction know a little bit about Mars the red planet and this is a website that I think will help you if you’re making a information report about Mars too http://easyscienceforkids.com/all-about-Mars/. I hope you good luck in your information report.

Monday, 18 May 2015

First up DLO

Hello this is a unfinished DLO but I'm showing you so I can have some feedback on it so I can make my next DLO better then this one. but the DLO was from this text called first up. Me and group readied the text and my friend Peter help too and this is our DLO.

Wednesday, 13 May 2015

Solving palce value problems with division



hello this is my second time making a explain everything video and this is different because this is about place value problems and I'm using division to solve it

Friday, 1 May 2015

Thinglink about ANZAC day.

This is my thing link also about ANZAC day. This back round for my thinglink is mans that went to the war and are killing people for a there barriers that they and there mates made.

My DLO for ANZAC day

This is my DLO about ANZAC day. It was fun doing it with my friends at school and I hope you like it because it took a long time.

My Reflection about ANZAC day

What:
That yesterday we made poppies that were for a ref to put under the flag pole. So it took a long time to make (because I didn’t know what to do) but then I told one of my best friend and she told me what to do and I followed her steps. After a few minutes I finished my first one but then I just heard that your suppose to do both sides so I went and did that. I finished my first one then 5 minutes later I finished my second one.

So What:
Why are we learning about ANZAC day is because ANZAC day was coming up soon and the next day (today) we got a service to do. By the time we finish our poppies we have to do an astronaut and our bookmarks (sorry got off track). But why is ANZAC day so special is because people scifres there life on the war to  make this world a better place

Now What:

I want to tell people that ANZAC is not a holiday that means nothing it is really something special and to make the soldiers that have made the rest of their life trying to protect their land.





This is my reflection about what did you learn so what are you going to do now what are you going to do.
I hope you like what I learnt and what I want to do now.